Shifting
July 19, 2012
Shifting plates, sands sweep
away memories. Hearts drift,
solid fondations melt
flowing to a river
coursing through
the paths of the seas,
forming another body
of water and the land
now buried.
Evolved, a place of dry
and life is crying
weathered away to young.
Rebuild. Rebuild trust
from a broken city, ruined
by sands that have
swept the land with course air,
where clouds forget to weep.
If the dew of hope will
graciously make an entrance
settling softly on the land despaired,
springing a delicate fold of care
of newness and beginning
to replant and rebuild.
Allison Ashton©
Comments
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I come from good stock when it comes to writing. I will give you the best constructive criticism I can. Be happy with this work. It's really good. That's my advice. It's well written. It flows nicely. The narrative doesn't digress. The meter and timing are delicate and precise which makes this easy on the mind to engulf. Well done.
awwh that's sweet! Thank you very much!!1
Posted by frederiqueroy70 on July 29, 2012
Congratulations on your BLUE XPRESS feature, Alli!!
Posted by aashton on July 30, 2012
Thanks Freddie!!
Posted by paulaayers on July 28, 2012
Congrats on your BLUE feature!!
Posted by aashton on July 30, 2012
Thank you paula!!
Posted by jvansyckle on July 28, 2012
Congratulations on your Poetic Feature! :-)
Posted by aashton on July 28, 2012
Thanks Jeff... nice to see you!
Posted by jvansyckle on July 29, 2012
I was thinking the same thing about you :-)))
Posted by aashton on July 29, 2012
But, all I see is your feet.
Posted by aashton on July 29, 2012
awwwwh
Posted by jethro61 on July 28, 2012
Congrats on your feature Ali!
Posted by aashton on July 28, 2012
Hi Jethro! thank you!
Posted by kishory on July 28, 2012
Nice poem Aston. Congrats on your feature :-)
Posted by aashton on July 28, 2012
Thanks so much!
Posted by rlroca on July 27, 2012
Alli, congratulations on your feature of this beautiful writing.
Posted by aashton on July 27, 2012
Thank you so much, Rosa!
Posted by lordtemplar on July 27, 2012
CONGRATULATIONS!!!!
Posted by aashton on July 27, 2012
Thank you....Chris!
Posted by lisameryl on July 27, 2012
Truly BEAUTIFUL in every aspect of the word...love the emotion and imagery from within...congratulations on your well deserved feature Allison!
Posted by lisameryl on July 27, 2012
I love the ending so much...GREAT message from within being delivered...
Posted by lisameryl on July 27, 2012
If the dew of hope will
graciously make an entrance
settling softly on the land despaired,
springing a delicate fold of care
of newness and beginning
to replant and rebuild.
Posted by rosyjenirosehall on July 27, 2012
Congrats Allison
Posted by lianne on July 27, 2012
I missed this along the way Alli - and I want to come back and reread this several times. But your phrasing here is just exquisite - lines that will haunt me, I think, for a long time. Congratulations!!
Posted by aashton on July 27, 2012
Thank you very much Lianne, I appreciate your comment, xo.